Writing Task 2 (Final draft)

Outline

Title: The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

Introduction

I.           Hook: When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure.

    Background: Peer pressure is the pressure that pushes us to behave in a manner similar to or acceptable to the group of members we are engaged in.

II.        Thesis statement: It is also the power that brings several positive effects to us. Peer pressure can give us encouragement, shape our personality, and take a closer look at our future.

Body Paragraph 1

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure can give us encouragement because of peer’s behaviors.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Peer’s ambition and diligence→push ourselves to follow

                  ii.                Confronting challenges or making mistakes→peer‘s support or suggestion, and teaching

Body Paragraph 2

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure can shape our personality.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Sharing upbeat values from friend→constructive thinking, healthy mind, brave, and self-confidence, feeling of comfort and energy, active learner

Body Paragraph 3

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure makes us take a closer look at our future.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Exploration, analysis, and contemplation

                  ii.                Looking at what others do and analogizing our future

Conclusion

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The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure. Peer pressure is the pressure that pushes us to behave in a manner similar to or acceptable to the group of members we are engaged in. It is also the power that brings several positive effects to us. Peer pressure can give us encouragement, shape our personality, and take a closer look at our future.

     Peer pressure can give us encouragement because of peers’ behaviors. When peers have a strong desire to fulfill a task or a goal, subconsciously they will give us desire to do the things well. For instance, when we are involved in working within a group of members who always shows their ambition and diligence to achieve the goals we set, we will push ourselves to take action to follow them and achieve the goal. Besides, whenever we confront challenges or make mistakes, they give us support or suggestion instead of discouraging us. They teach us to learn the lesson, look at the bright side, and accompany us to overcome the difficult situations. As a consequence, peers really encourage us to become a strong man.

     In addition to encouragement, peer pressure can shape our personality. Some of peers are our closed friends; they persuade us to bring about positive changes in the character. For example, several of my friends are always optimistic about everything, and enthusiastic about learning. They not only share the upbeat values with me but also make me have a constructive thinking and healthy mind to face everything. Gradually, they help me to build up the brave and self-confidence and give me a feeling that I am capable of achieving my goals. Therefore, I feel comfortable about whom I am, and I feel energetic to do any mission. They are just like a musician to help me become an active learner. Because of them, I enjoy participating in different activities, and start being enthusiastic about learning new information. It is they that help me generate optimistic and confident personality.

Finally, peer pressure makes us take a closer look at our future. It helps us contemplate on the ways of life and explore and analyze what we really want. For example, some of my friends are senior students who will soon graduate from college. Observing and listening to their plans for the future, we think about what we really want to do. Their experience guides us to get on the right track so that we can avoid having trial and error. As a result, owing to peers, we can evaluate ourselves constantly. Without peers, we can’t have a career guide to make us go to the road to success.

It is favorable for us that peer pressure gives us encouragement, shapes our personality and takes a closer look at our future. If we have the ability to distinguish and choose the right friends who are better for us from the peers, we will keep these valuable benefits forever.



100/05/02 Writing Task 2 (second draft)

Outline

Title: The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

Introduction

I.          Hook: When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure.

    Background: Peer pressure is the pressure that pushes us to behave in a 

    manner similar to or acceptable to the group of members we are engaged

    in. It is the power that changes our attitudes, values or behaviors because

    we want to be part of a group.

II.        Thesis statement: Peer pressure can have several positive effects on us. It can give us encouragement, shape our personality, and take a closer look on our future.

Body Paragraph 1

I.          Topic sentence: Peer pressure can give us encouragement because of peer’s behaviors.

II.        Supporting details:

                i.              Peer’s ambition and diligence→push ourselves to follow

              ii.              Confronting challenges or making mistakes→peer‘s support or suggestion, and teaching

Body Paragraph 2

I.          Topic sentence: Peer pressure can shape our personality.

II.        Supporting details:

                i.              Sharing upbeat values from friend→constructive thinking, healthy mind, brave, and self-confidence, feeling of comfort and energy, active learner

Body Paragraph 3

I.          Topic sentence: Peer pressure makes us take a closer look on our future.

II.        Supporting details:

                i.              Exploration, analysis, and contemplation

              ii.              Looking at what others do

            iii.              Trial and error

Conclusion

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The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure. Peer pressure is the pressure that pushes us to behave in a manner similar to or acceptable to the group of members we are engaged in. It is the power that changes our attitudes, values or behaviors because we want to be part of a group. Peer pressure can have several positive effects on us. It can give us encouragement, shape our personality, and take a closer look on our future.

     First of all, peer pressure can give us encouragement because of peer’s behaviors. Peers give us desire to do the things well. For instance, when we are involved in working within a group of members who always shows his or her ambition and diligence to achieve the goals we set, in a sense, we will subconsciously push ourselves to take action to follow the goal. Besides, whenever we confront challenges or make mistakes, they give us support or suggestion instead of discouraging us. They teach us to learn the lesson, look at the bright side, and accompany us to overcome the difficult situations. As a consequence, peer group really encourage us to become a strong man.

     In addition, peer pressure can shape our personality. Some of peers are our closed friends, they persuade us to bring about positive change in the character. For example, one of my friends, she is always optimistic about everything, satisfied what she has, and enthusiastic about learning. She not only shares the upbeat values with me also makes me have a constructive thinking and keeps healthy mind to face anything. Gradually, she helps me to build up the brave and self-confidence and gives me a feeling that I am capable of achieving the goals. Therefore, I feel comfortable about whom I am, and I feel energetic to do any work. Furthermore, peers are just like the musician that helps me become an active learner. All I enjoy participating in different activities, all I am enthusiastic about learning new information. Therefore, peers generate the abundant characters such as optimistic, capable, confident elements for me.

     Finally, peer pressure makes us take a closer look on our future. It helps us explore and analyze ourselves and contemplate on the ways of life. For example, senior students will soon graduate from college. What can they do for the future?   So they look at what group of members do, and then think about what they really want to do for the better future. In addition, we should keep trial and error so that everyone can find the different method that is suitable for individual. As a result, owing to peers, we can evaluate ourselves constantly. Without peers, we can’t have a career guide to make us go to the road of success.

     In a conclusion, it is favorable for us that peer pressure gives us encouragement, shapes the personality and takes a closer look on our future. If we have the ability to distinguish and choose the right friends who is better for us from the peers, we will keep these valuable benefits forever.

Writing Task 2 (first draft)

Outline

Title: The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

Introduction

I.           Hook: When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure.

II.        Background: Peer pressure means we are affected by a group of members that changes our attitudes, values or behaviors to get norms. This is because we want to be part of a group and feel like we belong in the community; it makes us behave in the ways that our peers accept.

III.     Thesis statement: Peer pressure may not be a bad thing; instead, it can have several positive effects on us. It can give us inspiration, shape our personality, and reflect on our lives.

Body Paragraph 1

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure can give us inspiration because of peer’s behaviors.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Peer’s ambition and diligence→strong aspiration and determination

                  ii.                confronting challenges or making mistakes→peer‘s support or suggestion, and teaching

Body Paragraph 2

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure can shape our personality.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Same upbeat values→constructive thinking, healthy mind, brave, and self-confidence

                  ii.                Feeling of comfort and energy

                iii.                Active learner

Body Paragraph 3

I.           Topic sentence: Peer pressure makes us have a reflection toward our lives.

II.        Supporting details:

                    i.                Exploring, analysis, and contemplation

                  ii.                Looking at what others do

                iii.                Trial and error

Conclusion

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The Positive Effects of Peer Pressure

When we spend time interacting with peers, we probably face peer pressure. Peer pressure means we are affected by a group of members that changes our attitudes, values or behaviors to get norms. This is because we want to be part of a group and feel like we belong in the community; it makes us behave in the ways that our peers accept. Peer pressure may not be a bad thing; instead, it can have several positive effects on us. It can give us inspiration, shape our personality, and reflect on our lives.

     First of all, peer pressure can give us inspiration because of peer’s behaviors. Peers give us desire to do the things well. For instance, if we are involved in working within a group of members who always shows his or her ambition and diligence to achieve the goals we set. In a sense, we will subconsciously push ourselves to take action to follow the goal. Peers make us have a strong aspiration and determination to satisfy the goals. Besides, whenever we confront challenges or make mistakes, they give us support or suggestion instead of discouraging us. They teach us to learn the lesson, look at the bright side, and accompany us to overcome the difficult situations. As a consequence, peer group really inspire us to become a strong man.

     In addition, peer pressure can shape our personality. Peer group persuade us to bring about positive change in the character. For example, when peers have the same upbeat values, his or her belief makes us have a constructive thinking, and keeps healthy mind toward everything. Similarly, peers build up the brave and self-confidence to give a feeling that we are capable of achieving the goals. Gradually, we feel comfortable about whom we are, and we feel energetic to do any work. Peers are just like the musician that helps us become an active learner. All we enjoy participating in different activities, all we are enthusiastic about learning new information. Therefore, peers generate the abundant characters such as optimistic, capable, confident elements for us.

     Finally, peer pressure makes us have a reflection toward our lives. It helps us explore and analyze ourselves and contemplate on the ways of life. For example, we look at what others do, and then think about what we really want to do for the better future. Furthermore, by trial and error, everyone can find the different method that is suitable for individual. As a result, owing to peers, we evaluate ourselves constantly. If without peers, we can’t have a life guide to make us go to the road of success.

     In a conclusion, it is favorable for us that peer pressure gives us inspiration, shapes the personality and reflects on our lives. If we have the ability to distinguish and choose the right friends who is better for us from the peers, we will keep these valuable benefits forever.